18921237919
雅思寫作徘徊在5.5分難以突破的考生，99%都在大作文犯過這樣的錯(cuò)誤：
考場上手都寫酸了，其實(shí)廢話占一半......
想要寫作有個(gè)漂亮的成績，需要讓自己的大作文中的每一句話都有用，尤其是核心段！今天就用一篇考官范文，分段給大家講講大作文的基本結(jié)構(gòu)~
題目：
A lot of young people do not know how to manage their money when graduating from high school. What do you think are the reasons? What can be done to teach them this important skill?
01
介紹段
和題目相關(guān)的背景句（可以不寫）或改寫直接引出觀點(diǎn)+預(yù)告?zhèn)€人觀點(diǎn)
Many young people are leaving school without a basic and vital understanding of how personal finances ought to be managed in the adult world. 改寫 This lack of knowledge is due to a lack of life experience and limited education which can be solved in two simple ways.
02 核心段
第一句必須是topic sentence（TS）。任何的感慨、不對段落做總結(jié)的句子都有可能導(dǎo)致后面的擴(kuò)展困難。
第二句需要對TS有直接解釋，任何跳躍的內(nèi)容都會導(dǎo)致Coherence and Cohesion（CC）低分。
接下來的句子必須要對前一句做出順利的解釋，不能車轱轆話反復(fù)說同一個(gè)意思。核心段的句子基本要體現(xiàn)逐步降層的邏輯。
核心段1
原因1 One main reason why so many young people are unable to manage their own finances upon finishing high school is that they have been living along with their parents for free. As a result, they have never needed to earn a salary or save their money in order to pay bills.
原因2 Another cause is that schools do not factor personal financial management into their curriculum. Schools focus instead on classic subjects, such as maths, geography, history and languages, which means important life skills are not being: taught. Both teachers and parents are failing to prepare young people for the real world.（此句更像topic sentence，放開頭可能會更好。）
核心段2
預(yù)告段落 There are two options for solving young people's inability to manage personal finances. Firstly, parents should spend time with their children teaching them how money is earned, budgeted and used for either: savings or expenses. One simple step could be for parents to start by teaching young children how to manage their pocket money and, as their child grows up, expand into more serious household expenses. Secondly, schools should incorporate life skills into their curriculum for final year students. In this way, children will be able to learn in a supportive environment how their finances need to be budgeted and managed to avoid debt problems later in life.
03
結(jié)束段
結(jié)束段唯一的任務(wù)就是總結(jié)重復(fù)，不能出現(xiàn)新的內(nèi)容或者與前面不一致的觀點(diǎn)。
PS.升華有風(fēng)險(xiǎn)，使用需謹(jǐn)慎?！n conclusion, young people lack financial management skills due to the negligence of parents and schools, which can only be solved if both take more responsibility for equipping school leavers with the right skills.
真正消化了大作文的基本結(jié)構(gòu)寫法，就是獲得漂亮寫作成績的第一步啦~詳情咨詢老師即可~
姓名
手機(jī)號
